The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.

The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.
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The graph given illustrates the money spent on various types of charity by unique companies between 2012 and 2014.All figures are measured in percentages From an
overall
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perspective , it is evident that the number of money spent on charity in health, wildlife and arts saw an upward trend over the
years
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,
whereas
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a zigzag pattern could be observed in the remaining part. Commencing with 2012 ,the proportion of profit spent on social welfare was the highest value at 22 . The data on others was lower,
however
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, the percentages of wildlife and arts were the lowest value, at 3. In the following
years
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, By 2013 social welfare was sharply down from 22 to 16
then
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up to 24 in the
last
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year .
Besides
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the number of money in education and the environment was similar but not as decreased as the first one from 8 to 5
then
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increased to 8.
While
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health
,
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and wildlife slightly rose from
6to
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6 to
9,3 to 5 in the
last
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two
years
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,Arts in 2013 had the same
in
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as in
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2012 but rose to 4 in the
last
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years
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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