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The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.

The chart below shows the donation given to six different types of charity by one company from 2012 to 2014.
The chart given
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illustrates
inllustrates
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illustrates
 a comparison of the
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donation
doanation
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creation
to
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 six different types of charity by one company between 2012 and 2014 From an
overall
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 perspective, it is evident the number of given to
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social
socail
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social
 welfare, health, wildlife and arts showed an upward trend,
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 a reverse pattern could be seen in the figure
of
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environment
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 over the period shown,
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, education
was be
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 the same from 2012 to 2014 In 2012, the
propotion
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proportion
 of present to social welfare was the highest, at 22. The data on health was lower, at 6. The figure on education and environment is equal, at 8. Wildlife and arts,
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, accounted for the lowest value, at 3. In the following years, after decreasing gradually to 16 in 2014, the quantity of
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donations
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 to social welfare witnessed a significant growth to a peak of 24 in 2014. Meanwhile, there was a consistent rise in the figure for wildlife, reaching
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5 in 2014. Before increasing to 9 in 2014 the
propotion
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proportion
 of given to health experienced a significant increase to 7 in 2013. There was a consistent rise in the rate for arts, reaching 4 in the final year, after
decrease
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 to 6 in 2013, the amount of present for education represented a significant increase to 8 in 2014.
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 the period from 2012 to 2014 saw a constant decrease in that of
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the environment
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 to a low 7.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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