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The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 projections for 2050. Sunrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 projections for 2050. Sunrise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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These four pie graphs illustrate the population
between
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of
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Yemen
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 and
italy
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Italy
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 in 2000 and the projections for
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further
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 50 years. To analyze these diagrams, we begin by taking a closer look at the data presented, it is obvious that in both countries,
labor
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 populations and teenagers are predicted to reduce, but elders are considered
increase
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 in 2050. As
it
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can be seen,
Yemen
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's
labor
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 population will grow up, roughly by 11%, and
Itaty's
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Italy's
 decline to 46.2%. In terms of the older people, the group in Italy may occupied from one-fourth to one-
third,
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and
Yemen
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's elderly individuals might rise 2.1% during the given years. Both nations
are
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predicted that newborn populations
will
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 drop by 13% in
Yemen
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,
3
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and 3
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% in Italy.
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 these countries, the proportions of children in
Yemen
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 totally overwhelm Italy's percentage between 2000 and 2050,
in contrast
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, there is
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the more
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more
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older population in
Itaty
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Italy
 rather than
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Yemen
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in Yemen
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. Regarding
to
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the category of adults, the citizens
at
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apply
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the age of 15-59 in Italy were more than
that
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apply
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people in
Yemen
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;
however
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,
this
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 scenario might
oppose
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 after 50 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words yemen with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Demography
  • Age brackets
  • Projections
  • Population distribution
  • Birth rates
  • Life expectancy
  • Working-age population
  • Elderly demographic
  • Healthcare
  • Socio-economic implications
  • Shrinking workforce
  • Labor force
  • Comparative analysis
  • Young population
  • Aging process
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