you are going to study at a college in another country " you need to find a place you will live. - Write a letter to the College's accomodation officers in your letter, - give details of your course and your arrival date - describe the kind of accommodation you need - Say what you like the accomodation officer to do

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Dear Mr Francis , I hope

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message finds you well. My name is Paul Favour , and I am excited to be joining Mallen College for my Bachelor of Science in Early Childhood Development Education which begins on Sept 5th 2025. I will be arriving in Canada on the 21st of August 2025 and would immensely appreciate your assistance in finding a suitable shelter for me. I am looking for an on-campus accommodation, preferably a shared apartment so it’s easier for me to connect and interact with other students which will help my transition into a new environment smoothly and be fun. It would be ideal if the apartment had a private washroom and kitchen to avoid inconveniencing other fellow students.

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, closeness to the library, gym and public transportation would be very helpful in

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regard. Conclusively , if there are any available options I would love for you to provide me with the necessary details , like pictures or videos and

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what the accommodation process entails. The cost and required documents and

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I would like to know if there are any deadlines for the accommodation. Thank you for your assistance. I look forward to your prompt response. Yours Faithfully, Paul Favour.

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Consider adding a brief introduction about what drew you to the course or the college; it enhances the personal touch of your letter.

coherence and cohesion

Ensure to group similar ideas within the same paragraph more explicitly. For instance, discussing proximity to amenities in a dedicated paragraph could enhance clarity

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The letter has a warm and inviting tone, which is appropriate for addressing accommodation officers.

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The request is clear and well-articulated, making it easy for the officer to understand your needs.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

207 words

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