One of your friends wants to apply for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer. Write a letter to the camp manager to recommend your friend. In your letter: Say how well you know your friend Describe the qualifications and experience that your friend has Explain why your friend would be suitable for this job.
Dear Sir or Madam
Hope you are doing well and I am writing
this
letter to recommend my friend for a job at a summer school camp as a sports trainer that is
required for this
season.
Firstly
, I would like to say how well I know my friend. Shokh is my childhood friend and we studied in the same school also
. He was so
interested in football, so after finishing Rephrase
very
the
school he decided to be one of the local football club's Correct article usage
apply
member
Fix the agreement mistake
members
that's
called-"Mash'al"
Verb problem
apply
In addition
to this
, Shokh has a really good experience in training younger students because he has worked as a football trainer for the last
4 years. He didn't see enough career growth experience with his current employer and that's why he would like to switch his job.
I believe Shokh is the best choice for this
position as he has a lot of experience in his previous role. Thank you for time
and consideration and I look forward to your response.
Yours faithfully
PulatCorrect pronoun usage
your time
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task achievement
While your letter does well in structure, introducing the purpose, detailing qualifications and experience, and concluding with an anticipation of the response, focus a bit more on elaborating the specific qualities and accomplishments that make your friend suitable for the job. Provide concrete examples of his strengths and past successes as a trainer.
coherence & cohesion
Your letter presents ideas in a logical order, with each paragraph dedicated to a different aspect of the recommendation. However, to enhance coherence, try to provide more transitional phrases to guide the reader smoothly from one idea to the next. Moreover, consider more variation in sentence structure and length to maintain the reader's interest.