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Some people think young people are not suitable for Important positions in the government, while other people think it Is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion .

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It is often argued that new graduates are not ready for
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, Other people think that it is great for youth to manage
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 level of positions,clearly to support the new generation without waiting decades.
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energy
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 young people always have fresh thoughts in addtion
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 new pure ideas confidently start
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 after graduation. In conclusion,
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 of two both of views,
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 the new employees have
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coherence and cohesion
Try to clearly present both sides of the argument with balanced paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on one specific point related to the topic.
task achievement
Improve grammar and spelling for clarity. Proofreading would help eliminate errors that take away from your overall message.
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You provide a clear opinion in the conclusion and make an effort to discuss both sides of the argument, which is good.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Experience and wisdom
  • Fresh perspective
  • Innovative ideas
  • Contemporary issues
  • Energy levels
  • Adaptability
  • Emerging trends
  • Enthusiasm
  • Stability
  • Maintaining the status quo
  • Maturity and responsibility
  • Risk-taking
  • Far-reaching consequences
  • In touch with
  • Representative governance
  • Historical examples
  • Proven track record
  • Changing dynamics
  • Fresh leadership
  • Modern issues
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