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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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The line chart provides key information about the
shops
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 that closed and the
shops
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 that opened newly in one nation from 2011 to 2018. The units are measured in
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number
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a number
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 of
shops
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the diagram that the highest
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 of opening
shops
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at
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in
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 2011.
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, the majority of closed
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 were in 2013,
whereas
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lowest
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the lowest
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number
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 of closed
shops
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 was in 2015.
According to
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 what is shown, closed
shops
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number
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 was less than 7000 in 2011 and fluctuated until it reached
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 peak of nearly 7000 in 2013.
While
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 the
number
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 plunged clearly and reached less than 1000 in 2015. The
number
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 of
shops
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 increased significantly in 2016 about 5000 and approximately stayed constant through the years. In terms of open
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, in 2011 was about 9500 and dropped considerably to reach 4000 in 2012. The
number
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 of opened
shops
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 continued to increase at roughly 6000 in 2014
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 but fluctuated and accounted for 3000 in 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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