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Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre explain why the sports and leisure centre is important for the local community describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am Parth Suhagiya, and I am currently living in the Ottawa
community
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, which is a very good
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 where I have found all the amenities nearby. But I am writing to you about the
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center
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, which the
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 has decided to close next month.
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this
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 sports
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 helped me, my family, and my
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 in many ways as we went to
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 and spent our leisure
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as well as
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 played different types of games, which kept us fit and refreshed our
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stressful day. In terms of importance,
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 sports
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 is very useful for the
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 and other local people who live in that area. Whenever they have their free
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, they can spend
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 with family and friends,
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 it gives them a better place to play and relieve their stress.
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, most of the old people in our
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 use the
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 to do yoga sessions, or in the morning, they do some sort of exercise to keep themselves away from health issues. If the
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 closes locally, individuals will not have a good place to bring their children
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 play as well, and youth will not have a place to spend their leisure
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 with friends.
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, there are other things that affect the local
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. So, on behalf of the
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, I am requesting that you look forward to
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 and please do not close
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. Thanks and Regards, Parth Suhagiya

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Task Achievement
While you provided personal experiences and explained the importance of the center, try to develop each point further to create a more comprehensive argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Consider using clearer topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader through your ideas more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to vary your language and sentence structure to enhance your writing style and make it more engaging.
Task Achievement
You effectively communicated personal experiences that illustrate the value of the sports center to the community.
Task Achievement
Your letter has a polite tone, which is appropriate for addressing the council.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure centre
  • foster social bonds
  • physical health
  • mental well-being
  • constructive activities
  • accessible
  • exercise
  • community spirit
  • public service
  • anti-social behavior
  • cost-saving measures
  • vital role
  • recreation
  • negative impact
  • forecast
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