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Writing Samples
Band 4

You are a member of a sports club. Write a letter to the club president about an event that will be organized. In your letter, you should tell - What it is - Who I am inviting - What my role is in this event

Dear Sir, I hope you find it well upon receiving my letter.I am writing a letter to inform you about the event that will
going
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go
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 to take place
this
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 coming weekend. We
made
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 a discussion
together with
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 the club to organize a
one day
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one-day
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 basketball league which will happen
this
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 coming Saturday. Sir we invite you to take part in the league and other higher officials from the club were invited as well.You will be our
guess
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guest
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 speaker on that day to share a short welcome speech to the club. I will play as a referee during the game since we couldn't find an available referee to do
this
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 job.
Besides
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this
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,I'm
incharge
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in charge
as
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of
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committee
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a committee
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 as well. By the way, registration will
be commence
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 at 9:00 AM so we will see you there at 9:00. Your participation is highly appreciated. Faithfully yours, Rob

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coherence and cohesion
Consider restructuring some sentences to improve clarity and flow. For example, the phrase 'that will going to take place' could be simplified to 'that will take place'.
language accuracy
Make sure to proofread for grammatical accuracy and punctuation, such as correcting 'guess speaker' to 'guest speaker'.
task achievement
The letter effectively communicates the event details and your specific role. This shows a clear understanding of what is required in the task.
task achievement
Your tone is respectful and formal, which is suitable for a letter to a club president. This demonstrates awareness of the writing style.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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