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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
This
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 bar chart
give
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gives
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a
Correct article usage
the
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 number of mobile phones and
landilnes
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landlines
 for 100 people in
few
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a few
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countries
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overall
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, We can see that Canada,
US
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the US
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 and Sweden are very similar in the
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land
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landlines
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lines
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uesrs
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users
,
Itlaly
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Italy
 ,Sweden,
Denmark
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 and
UK
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the UK
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 are the
most
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apply
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countries
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 using mobile phones
Firstly
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debindent
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dependent
 on the chart we can see that the most
countries
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using
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used
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is
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are
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Denmark
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,
UK
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the UK
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, Sweden and
italy
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Italy
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by
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with
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 around 80 to 90 people, after that
comes
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comes to
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 Germany
by
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with
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 around 70 mobile phone
user
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users
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at the end
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 become the two lower
countries
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by
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apply
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using mobile phone
according to
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 the chart is
US
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the US
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 by almost 50, Canada by around 35.
On the other
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hand
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hand,
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 we can see the
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land
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landlines
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lines
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 users and
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Change the capitalization
Denmark
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denmark
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Denmark
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they
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apply
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are very similar to the mobile phone users but in
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Italy
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italy
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Italy
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 we can see
the
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a
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 huge
different
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difference
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 between them
but
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apply
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at the end
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 Canada,
us
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the us
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,
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Change the capitalization
Denmark
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denmark
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and denmark
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 prefer
use
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to use
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Use synonyms
Correct your spelling
landlines
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land
Correct your spelling
landlines
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lines
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 and the other
countries
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 mobile phones users are more than
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land
Correct your spelling
landlines
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lines
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, land, lines, denmark with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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