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Many people nowadays tend to marry and have children in their thirties rather than at a younger age. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Today,most individuals prefer marrying and beginning a family at the age of thirty rather than at a younger age.
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 fostering a sense of responsibility and solving financial issues,
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 essay will argue that the given perspective is a positive development. In
favor
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 of the first view,the main reason is that young
people
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 do not want to take any responsibility regarding
family
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the family
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 as they prefer spending the most vital part of
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to focus
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 on just themselves.
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, if
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 decide to marry or to have children they should be ready financially and mentally because members will not just meet family obligations but
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 share their
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 and duties for a long time.
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, on social media recent research shows that divorces increase every day owing to not getting on with another spouse.
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endeavor
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 to know each other for at least a year to prevent misunderstandings.
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, many young
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 suffer from financial problems including rent fees,fuel costs or public transport.
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 without family support , solving money problems is challenging
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 it might take years, it is necessary to live more comfortably.
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economic
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 crisis, young spouses take out loans to organize a wedding even after marriage they are compelled to repay.
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,parents plan to create a perfect
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 for their children before having a baby which requires many products, clothes,doctor's examinations and kindergarten or school fees. In conclusion, marrying and having children after addressing financial issues and being ready to take
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 duties is a positive development because it would lead to a less worried
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coherence and cohesion
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Your essay presents a clear argument regarding the positive nature of marrying and having children later in life.
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You provide relevant examples to support your points, which strengthens your argument.

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