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The chart gives information about marriage and children in a selection countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart gives information about marriage and children in a selection countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
 bar
chart
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 provides information with data about the average weekly
income
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 by families in two different periods 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, it is evident from the
chart
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 that the proportion of weekly
income
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 in 1968 degrees,
while
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 in 2018 was fluctuating.
Furthermore
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, the highest percentage of households spending was
in
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on
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the
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food .
In contrast
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, fuel and power had the lowest in the
chart
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.
To begin
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 with a detailed analysis, the
chart
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 illustrates that in 1968 , food was
most
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the most
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 striking
ternd
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trend
, which accounted for 35% of the total . Followed by spending on housing, clothing and footwear were one in ten of
the
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all. Leisure was slightly less than
this
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 value.
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 , personal , household goods and transport had
the
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a
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 similar ratio of
budget
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the budget
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 by almost 8% .
Finally
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, the lowest amount of
families
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families'
family's
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 weekly spending in
this
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 period was on fuel and power to about approximately 6 per cent .
On the other hand
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, in 2018 , leisure had
largest
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the largest
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 proportion
for
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of
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income
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 families, which was just over a fifth. Turning to amounts of housing was 19%. Food was not
noticeable
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 as in 1968 , which was solely half
value
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the value
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 of it . Following to value of transport
income
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 with 14% . There
were
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was
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 no change in
percent
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the percentage
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 of
income
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Household
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for Household
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 goods .
According to
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smallest
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the smallest
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 categories clothing, fuel , power and personal goods which created
of
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5% and 4% , respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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