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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differetn countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two differetn countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph provides information with data about
the
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global
water
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use
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 by three different sources Agriculture, industrial and domestic
use
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, with table illustrates how
this
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water
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 consumption in Brazil and Congo over a period of 11 years.
Overall
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, it is evident that Brazil has the largest percentage of
water
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 which
used
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is used
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 more in
agriculture
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agricultural
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 sources than
other
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in other
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 categories.
To begin
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 with a detailed analysis, the graph illustrates that there was a significant increase in
water
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use
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 over all the sectors .
For example
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,
in
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 the beginning of
the
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1900 , there
was
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 almost 500
kilometres
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 of
water
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 used for plants and
this
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 rate increased gradually to reach a peak at 3,000
kilometres
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in
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 the end of
period
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 shown. Followed
by
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, in the
frist
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first
 six years there was
not
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no
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 noticeable
recorded
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record
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 of
water
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 needed in
both
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either
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 industrial
and
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or
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 domestic sectors,
then
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 there was rapid growth in industrial
use
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 to about 1,000
kilometres
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 ,
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while
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with
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slight
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a slight
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 rise
of
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in
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 domestic
use
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 ,which accounted for approximately 200 Km.
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, it is clear from the table that the largest share of
water
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 consumption was in Brazil, which registered 26,500
kilometres
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 for 176 million ,
whereas
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 Congo had 100
kilometres
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 for 5.2 million.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, kilometres with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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