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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that professionals
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 as doctors and engineers are very important professions.
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 it is a commonly held belief that they should stay in the same
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 where they did their training, there is
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 an argument that they should have the freedom to choose where they want to
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 with, some individuals indicate that people like engineers and doctors should
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 in the same
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 they trained in to benefit them and develop their field there.
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, they will return the time and the money that the
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 invests in them by using their knowledge to enhance the infrastructure of these types of careers.
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, outstanding engineers and doctors’ achievements will inspire the younger generations, and
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 it will help increase the awareness of these professions.
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, Elon Musk the owner of Tesla and Space
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, trained and studied in America, he stayed there and reached phenomenal achievements in both electrical cars and rocket fields, and
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 had a huge impact on his
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 from an economic and scientific point of view.
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, many people argue that experts should have the free will to decide where they
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, including the opportunity to
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 on a global scale if
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 opportunities arise. It is possible to say that the interaction with more advanced society in their area of expertise will expand their knowledge.
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, the repetition of their hometown will be enhanced worldwide by the achievements they will achieve.
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, Doctor Khalid Aljehny was my instructor during my journey at King Abdulaziz University as an aerospace engineer student, he studied and spent half of his life in the United States, and when he went back to Saudi Arabia, his research contributed significantly to improving the aerospace sector,
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 he had a huge impact on the quality of teaching. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to
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 question. On balance,
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, I tend to believe that people should have the liberty to decide where they
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task achievement
Make sure you present a more detailed explanation of your ideas. While you presented good points, adding more elaboration can strengthen your arguments.
coherence
Although your introduction and conclusion are present, adding a clearer statement of your opinion in the introduction may guide readers better.
coherence
Ensure that you provide a consistent level of detail and clarity in all examples. Some examples were strong, while others could be more clearly articulated.
task achievement
Your essay presents a balanced view of both sides of the argument, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.
task achievement
The examples, particularly Elon Musk's and Dr. Khalid Aljehny's stories, provide real-world relevance that strengthens your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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