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Band 2.5

Some people think that the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Fundamentally,
this
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increasing
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 the cost of fuel
seem
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 to be reasonable for mitigating ongoing
enviromental
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environmental
 issues.
Nonethless
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, it can look as though we will get
substantial
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benefit
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, we should pay attention to how regulating or what measures
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will be applied. As fuel is a major factor for companies, human beings, states and many things
basing
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 on progressing it is not simple to reach environmental aims by just increasing price.
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, the importance of transport is
undenyable
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undeniable
undeniably
 for
traveling
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, working and other
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
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. Increasing costs lead to people stopping
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utilizing
utilising
 their own vehicles and the absence of that would be
fellen
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fallen
filled
 acutely. On
other
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 hand, another is the most problematic matter, protecting
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
. The effect of fuel
to
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on
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the enviroment
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enviroment
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environment
 is
being
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daunting day by day
,
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 unless people prevent that in
next
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 decades. Definitely, if increasing
cost
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costs
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 we will help to environment effectively. Even if there is a little bit
benefit
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 we have to check out
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 method. We do not see
it
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whether
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enviroment
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environment
endure
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to
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us. We have to some ways as possible
as
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we can to help and enlarge our lives.
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, in my opinion, since
we
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 accountable for our damages we must figure
ut
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out
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 what the best solution is by ourselves. If
that is
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is
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,
then
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 let us try

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coherence
Ensure that your points are more clearly articulated and structured. Consider using more paragraphs to separate distinct ideas and arguments. For instance, you could dedicate one paragraph to discussing the potential benefits of increasing fuel costs and another to addressing the challenges.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates an awareness of the complexity of environmental issues and acknowledges the significance of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental sustainability
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • public transportation
  • carbon footprint
  • economic incentives
  • alternative energy vehicles
  • fuel-efficient
  • government subsidies
  • economic disparity
  • urban planning
  • rural infrastructure
  • sustainable development
  • carbon tax
  • green technology
  • demand elasticity
  • energy conservation
  • climate change mitigation
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