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You recently organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter. -describe the party and how it went -explain why you were pleased with the hotel service. -suggest some improvements that the hotel could make.

#party #company #hotel #manager #-describe #-explain #service #-suggest #improvements
Dear Sir or Madam, The reason I'm writing to you is to thank you for the reception I had at your
hotel
 I'm Anna Smith, 30 years old, and I'm in business.The party at your
hotel
 was wonderful.Artists sang and everyone danced, some even sang songs out of joy.In general, the party was unrepeatable and unique. I was very satisfied with the
hotel
 service
,
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 because the service in the
hotel
 is provided at an excellent level.
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, serving food on time,
decorating
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and decorating
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 the table in a modern style. I advised you to slightly expand the parking lot around the
hotel
. Because the space is small, the cars are placed unevenly. I hope you will consider
this
 offer and get back to me soon. Yours faithfully. Anna Smith.
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Include a more specific introduction to make it clear why you are writing the letter. For example, begin with a reference to the recent party or event.
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Make your suggestions more specific for better clarity. For example, mention the number of cars that had issues finding parking.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between points to improve the overall logical flow of your letter.
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The letter comprehensively addressed all the necessary points of the task, which demonstrates a strong understanding of the requirements.
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The tone of the letter is appropriately formal and polite, suitable for addressing a hotel manager.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph is clearly focused on a single idea, which helps maintain clarity and coherence.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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