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Some people think the only purpose of prison is to punish crime. Others think it has other functions. Discuss the two views and give your opinion.

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Crime is Crime
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 scale or small. A number of individuals believe that the only motive of prison is to
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 the left meditate it has different
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functions
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 I will discuss both the views and
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 my opinion in future paragraphs.
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 living in
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 time where crime could be anything and we can not replace the term unlawful act. In every
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, laws are different
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 if some masses
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 in any criminal act they should be punished. The main reason
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 prison is to teach an individual about
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society
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 ethics, laws and cultural values and most of the community trust that the only place where they can
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behavior
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is
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 prison.
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, under U.A.E judiciary

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language
Ensure to use more formal language and avoid sentences that are too informal or ambiguous. Phrases like 'scalped an offense' and 'left meditate' are not clear. Instead, try to say 'the primary purpose of prison is to punish offenders' or 'others believe it serves different functions.'
organization
Clarify your ideas with better organization. Consider separating your discussion into clearer paragraphs that address each viewpoint and then your own opinion. This will enhance the logical flow of your essay.
examples
Use specific examples to support your point of view. For example, you mentioned the U.A.E judiciary but didn’t finish the idea. Provide a complete example to strengthen your argument.
structure
You have introduced both perspectives on the topic, which is essential for this type of essay.
clarity
Your intention to give your opinion is clear, which is a positive aspect in writing for IELTS.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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