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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summariae the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summariae the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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 line chart displays an indication of electrical devices in households and
amount
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the amount
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 of time for doing
housework
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for
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apply
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every 7 days in the same period.
Overall
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,2 graphs consist of various data to demonstrate of relationship between appliances and hours of
housework
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.
According to
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 the first line,a maximum growth took happen in the usage of refrigerators from 0% to 100% .
On the other hand
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,on the second line,
amount
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the amount
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 of hours of
housework
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 decreased dramatically from 1920 to 1960.
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,between 1980 and 2019,the percentages of
the
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apply
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refrigerators remained stable like from 2000 to 2019 for
the
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apply
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vacuum cleaners.
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,based on data for washing machines,there only slightly increased from 1980 to 2019.Meanwhile,in 1940 indicators of washing machines, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners
closed
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close
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 to each other were 60%,55% and 50%,respectively.
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,the percentages fluctuated between 50% and 10% for
housework
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.There was a slight change from 1960 to 2019.To illustrate all differentiation,the indicators of
housework
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 fell down to 10% from 50% within a given period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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