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To improve the quality of education, some people think that we should encourage our students to evaluate and criticise their teachers. Other believe that this will result in loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give you opinion.

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Many people believe that pupils should assess and criticise their
teachers
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 to enhance the quality of learning.
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other
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 argue that
teachers
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 will lose their
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 as
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teacher
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teachers
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 in the education centre.
This
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 essay will discuss both views. As far as
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 am concerned,
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 favour the
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former
 approach. On the one hand,
this
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 encouragement will help schools to find
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 candidate for that role. As a part of
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 process, candidates should
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 to a class to teach and on the basis of
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 feedback one's hiring should be done.
As a result
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,
this
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 will create a transparent selection system that will verify both
acadamic
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academic
 and practical aspects of teaching and that will allow us to hire
qualified
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a qualified
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professional
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professionals
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 for the job.
On the other hand
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,
teaching
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 profession is a highly respectable job and some standards should
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 during selection.
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 students to quantify a teacher is very
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disrespectful
 because they are
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 in
this
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 process.
Whereas
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,
teachers
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 should be hired by experts like Principal, Head of departments and many more,
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who
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 have the experience to judge somebody's
qualification
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qualifications
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.
To conclude
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, my inclination
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 towards the more practical way that we need to motivate students to give feedback
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 their
teachers
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,
that
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help
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school
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schools
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to
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apply
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hire a
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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 professional for the students.

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task achievement
Your introduction should provide a clear outline of the main points that will be discussed in the essay. Ensure both sides of the argument are clearly signposted in your introduction.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs. Using linking words or phrases can help connect your ideas smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Be cautious with spelling and word choice. For instance, 'foremer' should be 'former' and 'disrespectfut' should be 'disrespectful.' Proofreading for these errors can enhance the professionalism of your essay.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which is essential for this type of essay. This shows your understanding of the task requirements.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion succinctly summarizes your viewpoint, which is a strong way to end your essay.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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