Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities n the world are now “one big traffic jam”. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

In
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modern era, there is an enhancement in car ownership that resulted
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congestion in some cities. I agree with
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statement since it happened as well in my city, South Jakarta.
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essay will elaborate on the
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's approaches to reducing the use of private
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by citizens.
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, the
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can increase the amount of comfortable public
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. To illustrate, a decade ago,
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who lived in Jakarta, which is a capital city in Indonesia, were likely to use their own
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instead
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of public
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. It happened because private
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were more comfortable than mass
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,
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as buses, trains, etc. But, when the
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establishes The Mass Rapid Train (MRT), which is really fast and comfortable,
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tend to choose
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transportation
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, rather than theirs. It is a good movement by the
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that makes
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discouraged from using their own vehicles. Other benefits of
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approach are reducing the traffic and air pollution.
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, the
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can regulate the ownership of
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, especially in
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. As an illustration, in Indonesia, there is a regulation called progressive
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for the car's ownership. Those citizens, who have many
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, have to pay more
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for their second
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, third cards, respectively.
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circumstance makes
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reconsider to have many
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and they choose to use mass
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given by the
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.
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approach does really discourage
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from having their own vehicles. In conclusion, there are many approaches that can be used to discourage
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from using their
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,
for instance
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establishing comfortable public
transportation
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and regulating
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. Based on evidence in Indonesia, these two examples impact society to not using their private vehicles.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly outline your main points in the introduction to set expectations for the reader.
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Consider adding more details or examples to support your arguments, especially in discussing the impact of the measures proposed.
coherence and cohesion
Use cohesive devices more effectively to connect your ideas and paragraphs smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that all evidence presented is clearly linked back to the main argument to strengthen your essay's overall clarity.
task achievement
Good use of specific examples related to Jakarta and Indonesia to illustrate points effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Clear conclusion that summarizes the main ideas discussed in the essay.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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