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The table below show daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below show daily oil production in four countries from 2000 to 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A glance at the figure given illustrates the daily
production
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 of
oil
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 in four countries, which are
Nigeria
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,
Chad
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,
Congo
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, and
Somalia
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, from 2000 to 2004. Based on an
overall
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 perspective, it can be seen that the highest daily
oil
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production
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 in these four
years
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 was in
Congo
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, whilst the lowest daily
oil
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production
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 was in
Chad
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. From 2000 to 2003,
Congo
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 attained the first position for the
oil
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production
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. The following spots were
Nigeria
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,
Somalia
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 and
Chad
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.
Moreover
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, there were changing places in 2004, that
Nigeria
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 obtained the first place by 213.000.
Furthermore
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, the second spot was
Congo
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 at 203.000,
while
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 the next places were
Somalia
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 and
Chad
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, which were at the same amount at 50.000.
Nigeria
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 had fluctuating daily
oil
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production
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 from 2000 to 2004. It reached its peak in 2004.
In addition
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,
Chad
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 started its
production
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 in 2003 at 8.000 and reached its peak in 2004 at 50.000.
Subsequently
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,
Congo
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 had a stable decrease in
oil
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production
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 in these four consecutive
years
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, from 275.000 to 203.000. Meanwhile,
Somalia
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 had increased progressively for daily
oil
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production
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 in these
years
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, from 5.000 to 50.000. In conclusion,
Chad
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's daily
oil
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production
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 was the lowest since it had no
production
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 in three consecutive
years
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, from 2000 to 2002.
Congo
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 had the highest daily
oil
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production
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 but there was a fluctuating
production
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 each year.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, oil, nigeria, chad, congo, somalia, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production levels
  • Trends
  • Increase/decrease
  • Fluctuation
  • Stable
  • Peak production
  • Output
  • Significant changes
  • Yearly comparison
  • Global production
  • Correlations
  • Patterns
  • Volume of production
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