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The bar chart shows the production of fruits by weight in the years of 1995, 2005 2015

The bar chart shows the production of fruits by weight in the years of 1995, 2005 2015
The bar chart presents detailed information about
fruit
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the fruit
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 manufacturing process by
million
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kilogram
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kilograms
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 over the given time.
Overall
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, it can be observed that
,
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 the highest rate was taken by pears with
amount
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an amount
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 of approximately 140
million
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kg
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 in Australia, in 1995,
however
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, the opposite was true for peaches in the same years. Looking at the details, at the beginning the production of oranges took
for
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about 70
million
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kg
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 and
this
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 index changed steadily
the
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over the
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last
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 two decades from 70 to about 85
million
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. When it comes to apples, at
first,
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the production found
his
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its
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 point to almost 80
million
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kg
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 and
the
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in the
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 next 20 years, there
were
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was
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 a significant growth in 2005 and it peaked
to
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at
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 120
kg
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2015
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in 2015
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. The following column witnessed a dramatic
rose
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rise
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 to 138 in 1995 and dropped rapidly
till
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to
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 80
million
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the
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in the
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 remained year. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that, the downward trend
was belonged
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belonged
has belonged
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 to peaches.
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Initially
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Initially,
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this
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 rate was the lowest
which
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apply
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experienced
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experiencing
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 40 thousand tons and
this
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 criteria had a sharp
rose
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rise
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 for about 65
millions
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million
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kg
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 and remained stable
the
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for the
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 next 10 years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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