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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
The chart shows the number of
householdds
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households
 who received annual
income
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 in 2007 and 2015.
overall
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,39
million
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families
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 received an annual
income
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 of 100,000 or more, which is a high
income
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.
This
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 is followed by 28
million
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families
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 who received between 25,000 and 49,000 of annual
income
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.In 2011, 30
million
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families
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 received 25,000-49,000, and some 29
million
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families
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 received less than 25,000 of their annual
income
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.But in 2015,
families
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 witnessed a significant increase to 33
million
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 individuals with an amount of 100,000 and more.In cases of decline, the years 2007 and 2011 witnessed a decline of 14
million
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families
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 by an amount of 100,000 or more, and
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 is very difficult.In 2015, there was a decrease of 15
million
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families
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, approximately 75,000-99,999.
This
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 was followed by 2007, 2015 and 2011, which saw an equal decrease of 20
million
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families
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, with a value of 75,000-99,999 thousand.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, million, families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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