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Some people say that the main environmental problem is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some say that
,
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apply
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 the most
dangeres
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dangerous
 problem for
environment
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the environment
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 is
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the lost
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lost
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loss
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 of some
species
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of floura
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floura
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flora
 and fauna,
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however
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 others believe that
,
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 there are much more vital issues which need to
adress
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. In
this
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essay
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essay,
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 we will discuss both sides. On the one hand, there are some wild
hibitants
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habitants
habitats
 which
plays
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play
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crucial
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a crucial
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role
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roles
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 in a natural
lifechain
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life chain
. In
other word
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another word
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, some
species
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 like bees,
ansts
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ants
 or even small animals have to be saved in order to preserve life
scycle
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cycle
in
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on
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 the earth.
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, as everybody knows bees take
significant
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a significant
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 place in
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the polination
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polination
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pollination
 of crops,
plants
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and plants
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 like flowers and even service people to produce honey for human
concumption
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consumption
. if there
will not
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be
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species
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 like bees or ants it will lead to
destroying
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the destruction
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 of
polination
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the polination
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 system which can
couse
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cause
 heavy consequences.
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, people should worry about other environmental problems like air pollution, soil erosion, deforestation
due to
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 urbanization.
That is
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 to say, these problems may
effect
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affect
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 not only wild
species
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,
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apply
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 but can be
disaster
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disasters
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 for
human
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humans
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also
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.
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, if we will take
the
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 problem like deforestation, that issue may
doubled
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 and can
couse
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cause
 issues
such
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 as lack of food,
natural
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and natural
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 materials.
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as
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 a result,
a
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apply
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climite
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climate
 change can cause the biggest problem for humankind and
to
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for
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 local
species
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similarly
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. In conclusion, despite
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the norrow
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norrow
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narrow
sorrow
 situation with wild animals in
the
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apply
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nature
in my opinion
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, in my opinion,
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 these
type
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types
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 of
issue
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issues
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 like climate change and
indangered
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endangered
species
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 should
take
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be taken
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 into account equally.

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language improvement
Ensure correct spelling and grammar, especially with words like 'dangerous', 'flora', and 'fauna'. Proofreading can help catch these errors.
language variation
Make sentences more varied in structure to improve readability and maintain the reader's interest.
content development
Expand on the connection between the loss of species and human impact to strengthen your argument.
content development
Clarify and elaborate on points made about deforestation and climate change to provide a more thorough argument.
structure
The essay presents both views effectively and makes a clear attempt to discuss environmental issues.
content
A variety of environmental problems are mentioned, showing an understanding of the complexity of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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