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Band 4.5

More and more companies allow their employees to work from home or “remotely” rather than going into an office each day. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

Majority
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The majority
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 of corporations give a chance to their workers to complete
there
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their
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 tasks online by staying at
home
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.
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,
this
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 could have some pros and cons .But
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 me,the
overall
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 benefits are likely to be greater the the drawbacks.
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work
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working
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 from
home
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 will help employees to reduce the travelling
time
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 to reach
there
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their
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 respective offices.
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, A
person
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 living twenty
kilometers
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kilometres
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 away from
tghe
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the
 office has to travel daily for two hours to reach
job
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 site.
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,
this
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 leads to the wastage of
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time
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 and
make
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makes
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 more
fatiguiy
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fatigue
fatiguing
 and reduces his or her capacity to
work
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.Certainly,
this
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 will
affects
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 the productivity and
workng
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working
 strength of the employee and will reduce his or
efforts
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her efforts
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 to complete the
assinged
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assigned
 tasks.
Further
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,
this
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 will directly
effects
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 the growth of the company. Another reason is,
the
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person
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 working from can concentrate more on
its
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their
his
her
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work
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.To elaborate, in
offices
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offices,
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 there are vast
number
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numbers
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 of employees working at the same
time
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a
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the
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 same roof which will leads to
lack
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a lack
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 of
concetration
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concentration
 on the given
responsiblity
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responsibility
.
But on
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 the other ,
by
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apply
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staying in his or her
quit
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quiet
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 residential place will allow
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person
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a person
the person
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 to indulge in
work
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 more effectively or
efficently
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efficiently
.
Moreover
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 , the
overall
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 capacity of growth and
achievmen
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achievement
achieve
achieved
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and
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apply
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which can motivate other
collegeaues
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colleagues
 to
work
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 in
same
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the same
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 manner. But on the same spot, it
also
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have
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 cons.
Although
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,
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work
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working
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 from
home
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 provide plenty of quality
time
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 to focus on the given
responsibilites
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responsibilities
 but on some
occasions
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occasions,
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 a
person
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 can become fearless because nobody is there to supervise his or her
work
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 and can
indulgde
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indulge
 his or
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time
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her time
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 in other
liesure activites
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leisure activities
 which will delay his
time
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 to complete his job.
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, in a hurry to complete his
work
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 in less
time
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 he or she can mess up all the things and can make
there
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their
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 working life more complicated.
To conclude
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, these were some pros and cons of
increasing
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the increasing
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 trend
o
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of
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work
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working
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 from
home
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.But the advantages are more as compare to disadvantages because
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from
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apply
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help
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helps
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 workers to become more effective and allows more opportunities to
work
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 in
there
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their
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 favourable conditions .

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Task Achievement
Make sure to proofread your essay for grammatical errors and typos. For example, 'there' should be 'their' and 'tgher' should be 'the'. Also, ensure that you properly support main points with clear arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Structure your paragraphs clearly: Introduce your main idea in the first sentence, provide supporting details, and conclude with a summary of the point.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and sentence structures to improve your essay's quality. Avoid repetitive phrases or simple sentence structures.
Task Achievement
You clearly stated your opinion on the advantages outweighing disadvantages; this is important for task achievement.
Task Achievement
The examples provided about time management and concentration were relevant to the topic and helped illustrate your points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote working
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • distractions
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • office space
  • commuting
  • professional wardrobe
  • boundary
  • burnout
  • face-to-face interaction
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • isolation
  • workplace culture
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