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The table below shows the changes in the percentage of lawyers choosing jobs in different industries in a specific country from 2001 to 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the changes in the percentage of lawyers choosing jobs in different industries in a specific country from 2001 to 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table given compares
between
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the rates of women and men lawyers in more than three fields, private lawyer, business, government and other majors in 2001 and 2016.
It is clear that
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 the percentages of females are more than males in all industries in the oldest year.
Moreover
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, in 2016, their numbers were
also
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 higher than others, except in fields that are not mentioned. In 2001, 15% of males
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 to work
as
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 private,
while
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 just 14%
choosed
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choose
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working
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 in business and
womens choosed
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women chose
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equal
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 percentage.
In contrast
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, the highest amount of them in the same period was for those who undertook
govrenment
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government
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that
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female
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fewer than men
they
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was
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 41%.
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, about
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male
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 lawyers worked in other fields.
Subsequently
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,
private
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 lawyer was
choosen
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chosen
 by 19% of
male
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males
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 and 21% of
female
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females
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 and
famale
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families
was
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also
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 21% in business
while
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male
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is
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decreased to 14%. Regarding
to
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others male was much compared to
female
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females
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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