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Some people believe that teachers should not give homework to the school students. Others, however, contradict and consider that it is necessary for their education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Few people believe that
homework
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school
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students
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 by their teachers,
however
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on the other hand
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 some believe that
homework
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 is an
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essential
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education. In the following essay
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 discuss both
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arguments.
Body paragraph 1
Homework
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 has
alway
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always
 been
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 vital
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education as it helps in
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overall
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 understanding of the subjects. After learning
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 subject in
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, doing
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self study
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 which helps in
better
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 understanding of the subject. It
also
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 helps in improving the critical thinking
amogst
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among
 the
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, as
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self
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study
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study,
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 makes
students
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to
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deep dive into
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.
Body paragraph 2
In contrast
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, some
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due to
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 the burden of
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 get
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exhausted
excused
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 and have no time for any other extra activities, which results in
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 going through depression.
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 most of the
students
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 in India are
over excusted
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over-excited
 with
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 and
school
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homework
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 and have no time for other activities.
Conclusion
In
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 I believe that giving
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 to
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the student
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student
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 is important as it's an
intrigal
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integral
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 of
the
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 studies,
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however
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however,
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students
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 should not be overburdened with it.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clearer introduction that outlines the main points you will discuss. It sets the tone for the reader.
coherence and cohesion
Try using more transition words and phrases to improve the flow of your ideas. This will help the reader follow your argument more easily.
task achievement
Make sure to check for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'essiantial,' 'ill,' 'excusted,' and 'intrigal.' This will enhance the clarity of your writing.
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Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, citing studies or surveys can strengthen your points on homework's effects on students.
task achievement
You successfully presented both sides of the argument, which is essential for a discussion essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your stance on the issue, which brings closure to the essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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