The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrates
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the total
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of films released and the total
proportion
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of movie
ticket
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sales
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between 1996 and 2006 in a country.
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,
while
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three kinds of films,
drama
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,
comedy
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, and
fantasy
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experienced a significant increase over the period, only a romance movie recorded almost the same figure. In terms of cinema
ticket
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sales
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, the
sales
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of three sorts of films, as I mentioned before, accelerated significantly,
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the percentage of romance declined. In detail,
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drama
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,
comedy
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,
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fantasy
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and fantasy
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saw a considerable rise over the period, notably
drama
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experienced a significant increase from over a quarter to 35%.
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Similarly
, the
proportion
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of
comedy
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and
fantasy
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got
rise
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from 20% to exactly a quarter, almost 12% to over 15%, respectively. Regarding the ratio of cinema
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sales
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,
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the
proportion
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of
drama
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and
comedy
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increased steadily from about 16% to 17%,
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and 20
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% to 23%, respectively, a rise in that of
fantasy
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was significant from almost 3% to 7%.
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, the ratio of romance movie
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sales
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declined considerably from 5% to 3%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, ticket, sales, drama, comedy, fantasy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • depict
  • significant increases/decreases
  • highlighting
  • drawing comparisons
  • discrepancies
  • notable trends
  • unexpected findings
  • anomalies
  • phenomenon
  • emphasizing
  • evolution
  • implications
  • producers
  • distributors
  • audiences
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