The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the average household expenditure in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
The pie chart gives information about the comparison of the spending percentage in 2010 between Japan and Malaysia. 
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, the spending patterns between the two countries show slight differences across various categories. In Japan, the largest portion of expenditures goes to “other and good services”,
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in Malaysia, housing takes the highest spot.
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, healthcare represents the smallest percentage of spending in both countries.  As the data provide
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of Japanese people are likely to spend their money on good services, which was later followed by Food (24
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). Other things
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as housing and transport are considerably similar with 21
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and 20
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, respectively,
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, the healthcare sector only reaches 6
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of total expenditure. Meanwhile, in Malaysia, the majority of people spend their money on housing, which accounts for 34% of total expenses, followed by food at 24%. Other categories,
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as transportation and goods and services, show noticeably different percentages of spending, which
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10%. Healthcare receives the least allocation, with only 3% of Malaysians' expenditures going toward it.

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