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The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
We can see the chart above shows British Emigration to selected destinations from 2004 until 2007, I will summarize the information by reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Overall
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, we can see that Australia is the highest
all
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in all
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 the
years
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 after that
come
Wrong verb form
comes
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spain
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Spain
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, the
others
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other
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 countries
are
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apply
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go high
snd
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and
 low between the
years
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.
Fristly
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Firstly
, we can look
to
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at
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 the highest countries by selected destinations the first one
is
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in
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 Australia by almost 40 all the
years
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ecxapt
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except
 2006
the
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they
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 went to 50 and
the
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apply
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another
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other
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 country is Spain but they
dicrase
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decrease
decreased
 by the
years
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 from about 55 in 2004 to under 30 by 2007.
Secondly
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, we can see NEW Zealand
they
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apply
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also
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dicrese
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decreased
 from around 35 in 2004 to 30 in 2007, on
other
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the other
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 side USA they were around 35 in 2004
after
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and after
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 that they
dicrase
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decrease
decreased
 in 2005, but in 2006 they back to the
seam
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same
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 number. France
were
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was
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 from 15 to 25 in all
years
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 except 2005 they were around 35

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emigration
  • destination
  • peak
  • trend
  • attractiveness
  • decline
  • preference
  • economic factors
  • migration decisions
  • fluctuations
  • consistent choice
  • gradual increase
  • perceptions
  • living conditions
  • opportunities
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