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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040

The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040
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pie charts illustrate the percentage of power capacity in GW in 2015 with the estimate for 2040 It is clear from the charts,
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although
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that although
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 fossil fuels
tends
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tend
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 to decrease, it is still the
one
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ones
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 with the most energy. In 2015, Solar had
lowest
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the lowest
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 power but in 2040, it is predicted that Nuclear
was
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will be
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 the least popular energy It is interesting to note that fossil fuels and other renewables accounted for 64%,
23
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and 23
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% respectively in 2015. These can be considered as the 2 most powerful energies. But in 2040, it is expected that fossil fuels and other renewables reduce only
consit
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consist
 of 44%,
21
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and 21
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% respectively
On the other hand
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, in 2015, wind
was comprise
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comprised
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 2% but it is expected that wind has
rise
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raised
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 energy. In 2040, the rate of wind
powerful
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power
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 fell by 10%. Nuclear has not much variation from 6% to 8% it is predicted that solar has gradual. In 2015, solar reached 5% but in 2040, it
increase
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increased
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 by 7% and reached 12%. In
summary
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summary,
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 we can see that solar
is
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will
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 increase in the future

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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