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The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the average annual distance travelled by adults and the types of travel in 1977 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the average
distance
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 of each
vehicles
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vehicle
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 and walking among travelers in 1977 and 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 most adults
prefered
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preferred
 driving their own car,
while
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 they seldom chose the way of riding the bicycle. Most modes of travel can be seen an
increase
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increasing
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 trend between 1977 and 2007. Looking at the chart in more detail, in 1977, the figure for
car
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cars
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 had the highest
distance
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, with 2500
miles
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, and reached its peak at 7100 over a 30-year period.
By contrast
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, the
distance
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of
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for
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bicycle
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bicycles
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 stood at 80
miles
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, which was 90 times lower than
car
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cars
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.
In addition
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,
motorcycle
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the motorcycle
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 was
also
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 below
than
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apply
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100
miles
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.
Moreover
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, the
decrease
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decreasing
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 trend can be discovered in walking and bus, which declined
100
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by 100
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 and 300
miles
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 respectively in 30 years.
Finally
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, the
traveling
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travelling
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distance
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 of
train
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trains
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 grew from 900 to 1000
miles
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, and
taxi
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taxis
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 climbed to 800
miles
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 in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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