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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by a very small number of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

In contemporary society, several
languages
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 have become endangered
due to
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 an extremely small number of native speakers. It is thought that
this
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 phenomenon must be solved with financial support from the government,
while
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 others perceive it as disadvantageous because it is a waste of money.
To begin
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 with, the extinction of these
languages
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 means not only the disappearance of native speakers but
also
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 the loss of communities' traditions and customs. In recent decades, numerous
languages
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 have been added to the endangered list.
For
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this
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 reason, the government should take measures in order to prevent the disappearance of these tongues and help to preserve individuals' cultures.
For instance
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, the loss of language is usually associated with a decreasing trend of communication in these lexicons,
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, constructing more schools which include the education of local
languages
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 will foster interaction among children and make a contribution to saving the language.
On the other hand
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, there are proponents who believe that money should not be spent on it. The foremost reason for
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 idea is that governmental money can be invested in other spheres
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 as increasing pensions or salaries.
Moreover
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, it cannot be denied that obscure tongues do not play a significant role in the worldwide community.
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, spreading already familiar
languages
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 including English can lead to bringing nations closer,
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 contributing to the
overall
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 development.
To conclude
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, it is argued whether endangered
languages
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 should be preserved with the help of the government or be ignored.
Although
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 the finances could be spent on other fields, it would be mindful to consider the values of communities'
languages
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as well as
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 customs and traditions.

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Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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