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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014
The line graph illustrates the monthly price fluctuation of copper, nickel, and zinc in 2014. Generally, all of the commodities move in
the
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 similar direction, declining over the year.
In
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 the beginning of the period, nickel
has
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 the highest change rate but
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at
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in
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 the
end
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 it became the lowest.
Conversely
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, Zinc
start
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 with the lowest percentage and
then
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turned
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 into the highest
on
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 the latest month. The figure
of
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for
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 nickel price saw the most
fluctuate
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 over the other metals. It started with 6%
on
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in
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 January,
then
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 fell dramatically to -3%
on
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 June. After that, it rebounded significantly to 1%
on
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 November before it got stabilized ever since. The other two metals were slightly fluctuated. Zinc
was
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started with
significant
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a significant
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 increase
form
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from
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 1%
on
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in
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 January to 3%
on
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in
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 February, before it plummeted to -1%
on
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in
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 June. The figure
the
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increase
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steadly
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steadily
 before it rose dramatically to 2%
on
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in
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 December.
On the other hand
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, there was a
slightly
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 decrease
on
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 cooper from 2%
on
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 January to just below 0
on
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 June. Since
then
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, it rose rapidly to 1% by July before
increase
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increasing
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stedily
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steadily
 to around 1,5%
on
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in
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 December.

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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly change
  • prices of metals
  • trend
  • spike
  • fluctuation
  • increase
  • decrease
  • sharp rise
  • sharp fall
  • stability
  • volatility
  • data points
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • external factors
  • influences
  • market dynamics
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