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Write a letter to your direct manager. In your letter: Ask for time off and explain why Provide the dates and times for which you will be unavailable to work Describes what you will do to prepare or make up for your absence

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Dear Ms. Synder, I am writing my request to have some day off for a holiday with my husband. Every year
me
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 and my husband have a mandatory thing about
traveling
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travelling
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.
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, his birthday will be
on
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in
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first
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the first
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 week of August. We decided to be out of the country to celebrate his birthday, so we
can
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 spend time together and
this
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 is my birthday treat to him. It's a good
timing
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 for us to relax and unwind to regain our strength so we can go back to work more motivated. I would like to use my
leaves
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 starting August 1 to 7.
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, I would be able back to work
at
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on
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 August 9. Which is
monday
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, it's a good
of
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starting week to retrieve all of my
works
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work
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 for our
tream
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team
. Since August is a busy month, for the reason of, we need to release our project. I decided to take
over time
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overtime
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 as soon as I
come
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 back to work. As well,
to
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as to
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 help my
colllegues
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colleagues
 to finish the task on time. Thank you for your understanding. I'm looking forward
for
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 your response. Sincerely, Kate
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Logical Structure
Work on refining sentence structures to improve clarity in your writing.
Single Idea per Paragraph
Ensure all sentences are succinct and directly related to the main idea within each paragraph.
Logical Structure
The letter is well-structured with a clear opening and closing, making it easy to follow.
Complete Response
You provided a comprehensive response to all points, addressing the reason for the absence, the dates, and how you intend to manage your workload.
Suitable Writing Tone
The use of a polite and respectful tone throughout the letter enhances its suitability for formal communication.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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