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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
The bar chart illustrates average weekly
expendenture
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expenditure
 by
huseholds
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households
on
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in
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 various categories in both 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, food accounted for the majority of
families
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' weekly spending in 1968,
whereas
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 leisure made up the most in 2018.
On the contrary
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,
families
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 spent the least on fuel and power in both years. In 1968,
families
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 spent
the
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most of their weekly income on food at 35%, which was two times more than that spent on housing, clothing and
footware
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footwear
 at both 10%.
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,
families
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 spent only 9% on leisure activities, slightly surpassing the spending on household goods, personal goods, and transportation at 7%. Fuel and power only accounted for 6 % of their weekly income, which was the least. In 2018, the gap between weekly
expendenture
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expenditure
 of households' income
on
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 each category had become short, with leisure activities at 22%,
houing
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housing
 at 19% and food at 17%. The proportions of the other four categories, including fuel, clothing, household and personal goods, are similar at around 5%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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