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Writing Samples
Band 1

It is often thought that an increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violencein the media. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is commonly believed that success in different
field
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 in life
gains
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 from working hard and great management. At the same time, many people hold the opposite view there are more essential requirements
such
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 as budget and appearance.
This
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 essay completely disagrees with the second opinion.
However
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, we will discuss both sides. On the one hand, it is considered by several that education and working hard at university or a job are
an
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apply
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important
key
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lead
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leading
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 to better situations because
of
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high marks or a strong CV Is
a
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apply
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strong evidence of people's abilities.
Furthermore
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, it is more stable for
future
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the future
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 to earn a bachelor's degree or a
succeeded
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 project because they are going to improve and promote with additional work.
Such
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 as a suitable job in some
orgaisation
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organisation
 or a new contract and
enhance
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 the level of projects.

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Task Achievement
Strengthen the introduction by clearly stating your position and outlining the main points you will discuss in the essay. This will help set expectations for the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure to include a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points and reinforces your argument.
Task Achievement
Develop your supporting points with more detailed examples and explanations to provide a clearer understanding of your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your ideas flow logically from one to another. Use transition phrases to improve the movement between sentences and paragraphs.
Content
You have presented a clear disagreement with the opposing view, which is an important aspect of task achievement.
Content
Your essay introduces a relevant topic that many can relate to, which can engage the reader.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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