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Some people believe that large companies should pay their chief executive officers (CEOs) significantly higher salaries than other employees. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

At present, it is a very common thing to see
CEOs
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 receive salaries much higher compared to the other
people
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 working for the same companies. Some argue that
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 is the right thing to do. I personally agree with these
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 for several reasons.
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 with, it is generally believed that
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 have the hardest job in the organizations.
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 is because they work to make decisions, which sometimes can be very hard to do.
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 means that they sometimes need to consider the best interests of all the stakeholders.
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, If they need to boost sales of their products by lowering prices, they
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 have to consider cutting down the salaries of some employees to cover the expenses.
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, their jobs can be considered risky since a wrong decision might result in getting demoted or even fired. The second reason is related to their effort to get to that position. Companies have to acknowledge their effort to become
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 by giving them the highest salaries.
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 means that they need to appreciate how long
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 spent studying and how much money they invested in to get a degree and become experts in a field.
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, when they actually get their first job, they need to compete with other
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 to get promoted. They sometimes even work harder than everyone else to show the best performance. It is inevitable that they receive high
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 for all they have been through. In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, it is perfectly fine to have
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 getting a lot of money as a reward for their effort and responsibilities. They should become motivation for the young generation to
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thrive
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 to get a lot of money.

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Consider presenting counterarguments to strengthen your argument by showing awareness of the opposing view.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure to use a variety of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
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Try to elaborate more on your examples and ideas to present a more comprehensive discussion of your points.
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Your introduction clearly states your position and outlines the main points to be discussed, providing a clear roadmap for the reader.
coherence and cohesion
The content is relevant and well-structured, with paragraphs focusing on distinct points that support your argument.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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