Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this? What are some possible solutions? Beka

A lot of
people
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do not have adequate
time
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to look after
pensioners
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in their houses.
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phenomenon may result in younger
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being stressed out, and the possible solution is employee
caregiver
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. Many
people
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face the problem of looking after their elderly
parents
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or grandparents, which causes them a lot of stress. Many have experienced
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problem, but have not been able to solve it. Many simply do not have enough
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to look after
pensioners
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in their
home
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.
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makes them feel uncomfortable, since these are their loved ones and they try their best not to abandon them and be with them.
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we have a tradition that a son in a family always takes his
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to live with him. Since they need to be looked after,
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not everyone has
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for
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and many
pensioners
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and the children themselves suffer because of
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. But
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, the solution to
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problem could be to hire a nanny for
pensioners
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. Many are afraid that their
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will stop being close to them
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and that they will distance themselves. But
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will not happen because at times when there is no
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, a nanny can come and look after the elderly, and when you need to spend
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with your
parents
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, you can go for a walk with them in your free
time
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or take them somewhere.
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, I have a friend who lives with his
parents
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, but he does not have
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to look after them. He hired a nanny and
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his free
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with his elderly
parents
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. In conclusion, if
people
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don’t have
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time
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to take care of their elderly
people
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it will make them
stressful
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. As the solution for
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issue , it can be better
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to employee
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employee
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special assistance to look after them.

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task achievement
Your introduction could be more specific about the stress faced and the potential solutions available. It would help clarify the essay’s focus and intent.
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Add more relevant examples or explanations for each main point you raise to strengthen your argument.
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You present a clear understanding of the problem of elderly care.
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Your use of a personal example adds credibility to your argument about hiring a nanny.

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