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Band 4.5

some people say that it is better to work for a large company than a small one. do you agree or disagree

Individuals claim that working in a large
company
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 is much better than a small
company
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.
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,
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apply
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 it is beneficial for
people
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 to
work
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 in a large
company
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,
this
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 does not mean that a small
company
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 is not worth
to
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work
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 with it. To start, there are numerous
benifits
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benefits
 from working in a large
company
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. Most of the large
companies
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 have a good reputation which
strengthen
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strengthens
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 the
proffessional
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professional
 curriculum vitae of their
employees
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.
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, increasing business opportunities by attracting customers and
employees
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, and other
companies
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 to make
deal
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deals
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 with them.
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, the big advantage is
employees
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 get
a
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more
experience
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 because
the
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most of the big
companies
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employe
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employ
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 a
high quality
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 worker and
more
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are more
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proffisional
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professionals
as well as
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 they have more difficult and complicated contracts and meetings which give
chance
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a chance
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 for
employees
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 to take part and learn
for
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from
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 other workers to get more
benifits
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benefits
 from their
experience
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.
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, there are some
disadvanages
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disadvantages
 too. To
begain
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begin
, some
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of
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apply
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big
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the big
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companies
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 have a lot of
works
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work
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 and tasks which result in more pressure and load on the workers,
this
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have
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 a negative impact on most
of
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apply
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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.
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, some big
businesses
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 need more
efforts
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effort
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,
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however
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however,
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 the income is low compared to the
work
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 that
employees
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 do.
In addition
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,
the
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large
businesses
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 require highly
qualify
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people
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,
hence
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 some individuals
are
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have
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 recently graduated which
make
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makes
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hard
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it hard
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 for them to apply and get more
experience
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. In my
paint
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point
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 of view, I totally agree that big
companies
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 offer better and good
job
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jobs
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 for
people
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 compared to small
companies
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.
This
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because
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is because
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 they have
reputation
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a reputation
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, more
proffessional
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professional
employees
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, and they offer
annual
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an annual
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bonus
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bonuses
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 for their workers. In conclusion, most
of
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people
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 believe that working with big
businesses
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 can get many advantages
in contrast
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 to small
businesses
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. I do suggest that most
people
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work
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 hard and try to open with big
businesses
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 which take
alot
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a lot
 of
benifits
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benefits
 and build their
experience
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clarify your stance more directly in your introduction. Instead of saying 'this does not mean that a small company is not worth to work with it,' state explicitly that you agree or disagree with the statement.
coherence and cohesion
Please pay attention to the spelling and grammatical errors throughout your essay (e.g., 'benifits', 'proffessional', 'begain'). Proofreading your work before submission can help catch these mistakes.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single point, using topic sentences to clearly outline what each paragraph will discuss. This will improve the logical flow of your essay.
task achievement
Add more specific examples to illustrate your points. For instance, when discussing the advantages of working in large companies, you could mention specific benefits like health insurance or career advancement opportunities.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, which is a good start for task achievement.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • corporate culture
  • hierarchy
  • marketability
  • professional development
  • entrepreneurial
  • autonomy
  • networking
  • prestigious
  • job security
  • scale of operations
  • benefits package
  • research and development
  • innovation
  • professional networking
  • career advancement
  • organizational structure
  • flatter hierarchy
  • versatile skill set
  • benefits
  • work-life balance
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