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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
These diagrams present before and after versions of the
island
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 development. 
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, before the development and facilities, there
were
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was
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 almost nothing, just
a
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apply
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plenty
space
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of space
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 on the
island
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.
However
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, after the construction, the
island
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 turns into
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a tourist's
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tourist's
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tourist
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 paradise. It is interesting that the coconut trees and beach remain
on
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in
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 the same position
were
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where
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 they did.  After the construction, the vast
island
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 was turned into
the
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a
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 tourist's paradise. The center of the
island
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 is a reception
that is
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 surrounded by a vehicle track which connects to four other parts: a pier on the south that connects to the sea, coconut trees that surround the accommodations to the west, restaurants to the north, and round footpath enclosed by the accommodations on the east. All of the facilities
was
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were
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 added to facilitate the convenience for the tourist.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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