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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interestedin finding out about the history of the house or the building they live in. What are the reason for this? How can people research this?

An increasing number of people in some nations are starting to gain interest in knowing the history of the
house
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 they habituate. In my opinion, the main reason is the desire to reside in a home void of any legal issues but equally
one
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 without any horror stories.
These
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information
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 can be obtained by interviewing the past owners,the neighbours and even going to the city council.
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, legal problems are the most important reasons why individuals investigate buildings they dwell in.
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, I know someone who purchased a
house
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 and
one
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 day out of nowhere he lost his home. The
house
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 was seized by the bank because the former owner could not pay his loan and he had given the
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 as collateral.
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, some houses have
really
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 dark past.
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, I once saw over the news a story of an elderly woman who murdered children in her neighbourhood and buried them in her
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.
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, there are many ways in which people can access
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 about their houses or
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apply
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building
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buildings
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 they are planning to live in.
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 can directly interrogate the seller, even though sometimes they might not be truthful.
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, asking the people in that vicinity can
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 be of great use.
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, the city council holds
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 about all the buildings and it is free.
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, all the
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 has been digitized and is freely available as open-source material on the internet.
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, citizens can easily find all the needed
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 in
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 or two clicks. In conclusion, nowadays individuals are now intrigued by the history of the place they dwell in mainly
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 the fear of any Legal entanglement.

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Introduce a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to outline the main points you will discuss.
coherence
Use more varied linking words to improve the flow between ideas, such as 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' and 'Furthermore.'
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Expand paragraphs with more detailed explanations or examples to support your main points more comprehensively.
coherence
Well-structured paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details.
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Unique examples that illustrate the points you are discussing, such as the story about a past owner.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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