Some people think that famous people can help international aid organisations to draw attention to important problems. Others believe that the celebrities can make the problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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task achievement
Expand on your ideas to provide greater depth and clarity in your arguments. Ensure that you consistently provide examples to support your points.
coherence
Ensure that your paragraphs are cohesive and logically structured. You may want to use linking phrases to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and punctuation, particularly in the structure of your sentences. Some minor errors affected the readability of your essay.
content
You present a clear opinion on the topic and outline both perspectives effectively.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite