Some people think that famous people can help international aid organisations to draw attention to important problems. Others believe that the celebrities can make the problems seem less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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tend to argue whether celebrities are the ones who should be the face of certain organisations or not, to spotlight the issues in the world. In my opinion,
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a good use of their platform since they have a large audience base. In
this
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essay, I will discuss both views. There are several reasons why
people
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think that public figures who have an entertainment background like, Football players and musicians shouldn'
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engage with serious global problems.
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poverty, food and water insecurity and climate change. First, Most of them live a lavish lifestyle and don'
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really understand what
people
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who are affected by these problems really feel. And that could come out
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as inconsiderate
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.
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some think that celebrities only participate in these types of events to gain more fans and connections and don'
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really care to solve the actual issue. Even though celebrities don'
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come off as educated enough on these matters. but they are public figures with a large fan base whom they admire and see as role models. So when a celebrity focuses light on a worldwide problem
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a good usage of his or her fame. Because they.have a voice that can be heard by millions of
people
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who can help and raise the level of awareness in the communities that something could be done.
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, Donations، volunteering or even sharing knowledge To summarize, Both views are valid but to actually solve the world's issues,
people
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must acknowledge the problem. And that could be done by public figures who can reach and share solutions
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the rest of the world.

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task achievement
Expand on your ideas to provide greater depth and clarity in your arguments. Ensure that you consistently provide examples to support your points.
coherence
Ensure that your paragraphs are cohesive and logically structured. You may want to use linking phrases to improve the flow of ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and punctuation, particularly in the structure of your sentences. Some minor errors affected the readability of your essay.
content
You present a clear opinion on the topic and outline both perspectives effectively.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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