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Band 4.5

Some people think that intelligence is innate while others think that we can improve our intelligence through learning. Discuss both sides and give your opinon.

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coherence and cohesion
Your essay is not coherent as it does not address the topic or present clear arguments. I recommend structuring your essay into an introduction, body paragraphs discussing both sides, and a conclusion with your opinion.
task achievement
Make sure to expand on each point in your essay with clear explanations and examples. This will help to demonstrate your understanding of the topic and improve task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
Having a logical flow in your essay is crucial. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas, which will enhance readability and structure.
general
I appreciate your effort in trying to engage with the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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