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The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates data about the
number
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 of car trips into the city centre made by citizens and foreign
residents
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 and tourists from 96s to 2005. It is clear from the graph that, in the first four years which means from 1996 to 1999 the
residents
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number
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were
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was
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 higher than
non-
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the non-residents
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residents
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number
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.
On
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At
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 the
begging
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beginning
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 of the
2000s
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2000s,
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 the
number
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 of car journeys into the city centre made tourists
start
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started
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 to
increased
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increase
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 rapidly to
be
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apply
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more than the
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residents
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resident's
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number
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. In the period between 96 and 99 figures
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
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 between 9000 too 10000. Meanwhile, non-
residents
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number
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were
Verb problem
of non-residents
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increasing
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increased
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 from around 5000 to exceed 8000 and
start
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started
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 to fluctuate after that.
Moreover
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,
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of citizens and foreign
residents
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 dropped
on
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in
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2000s
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the 2000s
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 to around
record
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a record
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 5000
trip
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trips
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 per day on average and recorded unsteady numbers until the
last
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 period in the graph which is 2005. In the same
period
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period,
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 more parking meters
introduced
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were introduced
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 into
city
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the city
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 centre and the
tourists
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number of tourist
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 trips rocked after that until 2003, trips decreased to less than 4000 car
trip
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trips
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 per day and between 2004 and 2005 started to climb slowly. In conclusion, both data for
residents
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 and visitors were unsteady and many factors affected
on
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apply
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it, like
introduced
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introducing
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 parking meters and closing Westgate
street
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Street
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 and park lane because of traffic.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, residents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • car journeys
  • city centre
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • total number
  • significant differences
  • travel behaviour
  • trends
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak times
  • possible reasons
  • work commitments
  • leisure activities
  • public transport
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