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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph illustrates the
number
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 of
households
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 in the US by their annual
income
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 in 2007 2011 and 2015.the vertical axis shows the
number
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 of
households
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 (in millions)
while
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 the horizontal axis represents the respective year. They were
also
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 categorized into groups by their annual
income
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.
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Number
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A number
The number
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 of
households
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 which had
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an
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income
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more
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of more
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 than $100 000 saw a considerable upward trend. The tallest bar
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also
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is also
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 categorized under
this
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 group.
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Number
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A number
The number
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 of
households
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 which had
annual
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an annual
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income
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 between 75000$ - 99999 $ and 50000$ -74999$ maintained a constant level throughout the period. In comparison to 2007, 2011 and 2015 experienced a rise from 26 to 30.In 2011 and 2015
no
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none
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 of
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households
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the households
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less
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with less
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 than 25000$
income
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 showed minor variation but
overall
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 remained stable .
Overall
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 it is clear that no oh
households
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 greater than$100 000 increased slightly
while
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number
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 of
households
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 less than $25000 remained stable. in
conclusion
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conclusion,
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this
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 graph indicates a possible improvement in
overall
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 economic conditions.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, households, income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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