MANY PEOPLE LIKE TO EAT UNHEALTHY FOOD EVEN THOUGH THEY KNOW THAT IT IS BAD FOR THEM. WHY IS THIS THE CASE? WHAT MEASURES CAN EFFECTIVELY IMPROVE PEOPLE’S UNHEALTHY EATING HABITS?

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plays
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role in
people
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's life. Many
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enjoy eating
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junk
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even though they know that
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can lead to serious health consequences. in
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will discuss why
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happenes
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and what measures can reduce unhealthy eating habits.
Firstly
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,
people
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love to eat fast
food
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because of
lack
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of time. individuals who work until night do not have enough time to cook and it is easy and
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convenient
to order something fastly.
furthermore
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, many
people
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find unhealthy
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such
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as fast
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,
sugary
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and sugary
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snacks to be satisfying and happy.
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, sugar can give pleasurable
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for
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brain
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and it helps
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to be patient.
in addition
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, there are many
restaurats
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restaurants
in the city and many
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of attractive
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.
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,
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advertising
can play
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role because humans can be
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affected
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by social media and they will buy whatever they see.
secondly
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,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
should improve
peaple's
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people's
knowladge
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knowledge
about
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of
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unhealthy
food
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for example
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, in
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school
should be added subject about being healthy and the consequences of eating unhealthy
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.
also
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,
state
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should reduce the number of fast
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restaurats
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restaurants
and
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apply
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rise
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raise
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the number of healthy
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restaurants and make the price affordable for healthy
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.
people
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should comprehend that
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of
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the
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healthy life is
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a healhy
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healhy
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healthy
meal. in conclusion, unhealthy
food
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obviously
cause
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a harmful influence on public health
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,
people
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love it
becuse
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because
of their cost and availability.

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Try to use more complex sentence structures and vary your vocabulary to demonstrate a higher command of language.
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Ensure your introduction clearly outlines your main points to give a robust framework for your essay.
content
Include more specific examples and details to support your arguments, which will strengthen your ideas and make them more persuasive.
task achievement
You've addressed the prompt effectively by discussing reasons for unhealthy eating habits and suggesting measures to improve them.
content
Your use of relatable examples, like the effects of sugar, shows a good understanding of the topic.

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You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cravings
  • addiction
  • processed foods
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • cultural influence
  • social norms
  • nutrition
  • educational campaigns
  • emotional eating
  • unhealthy eating habits
  • pleasurable response
  • balance diet
  • health risks
  • comfort foods
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