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Band 4

Parents are best teachers. Do you agree or disagree ?

In
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 period of globalization, many
people
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 are thinking about who are the
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best
teachers
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 for children
that
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parents
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 are good
teachers
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. Some
people
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 believe that
parents
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 are the best
teachers
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 in our
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life
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. In my opinion, I strongly agree with
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 notion and my opinion will be discussed in
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 paragraphs with a suitable conclusion.Supporting my agreement
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 the given statement, I firmly believe that
parents
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 teach us the first lessons in
life
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. To cite an example, they show us how to walk, talk, and eat when we are very small.
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,
parents
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also
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 teach us good habits like honesty and kindness.
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, my mother always says that we should respect others and help poor
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. Explaining some of the
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 in favour of
this
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 statement, it is true that
parents
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 care for us and give us advice when we have problems.
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, we feel safe and happy with them. They always support us and want us to live a good and successful
life
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. In conclusion, many
people
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 are discussing who is the best teacher for a person in
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. I believe that the aforementioned points
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strongly
supporting
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 my viewpoint that
parents
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 are the best
teachers
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 because they love us, teach us good values, and help us in every situation.

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Try to develop your ideas more thoroughly. Provide more detailed examples or explanations to substantiate your points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your supporting points flow logically and are connected more clearly. Using transitional phrases could help in this area.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid small grammatical errors to enhance the overall clarity of your writing. Proofreading your essay before submission could help in catching these errors.
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Your introduction clearly states your viewpoint and outlines what will be discussed in the essay.
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You have effectively conveyed the emotional connection that parents have with their children, which is a strong point in your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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