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Band 7.5

You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking country. You are not satisfied with the condition of some of the furniture. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter introduce yourself explain what is wrong with the furniture say what action you would like the landlord to take You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .................,

Dear Mr. Brown, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction towards a piece of furniture which you provided us in our rented home
along with
Linking Words
 the suggestions to change it.
Last
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 month, I rented a home at 3220 Tacc Drive, Mississauga from you, and as per the lease agreement, it is a fully furnished home. All the things are working very well, but the only concern is with the drawer set placed in the living room. One of the cabinets does not have a handle to open it, and another of them is broken from the bottom part, so we cannot keep anything in those sections.
Also
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, other cabinets are
also
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 very tight. So, in
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 it is completely useless for us. As per the rental agreement, any replacements will be done by you free of cost. I request you to either provide us with a new drawer or a used one. For your easiness, I would suggest you check Amazon, or Facebook marketplace, where you can get good deals. Hoping that you will consider my request at the earliest possible time. Yours sincerely, Kanwalpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using a clearer paragraph structure to separate the introduction, problem description, and request for action more distinctly.
task achievement
Make sure you are directly addressing the landlord’s needs while maintaining a polite tone, which you did well.
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The introduction is clear and provides context for the letter.
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The request for action is polite and provides practical suggestions, reflecting a cooperative tone.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Dear
  • I am writing to express my dissatisfaction
  • regarding
  • the condition
  • furniture
  • belongings
  • for instance
  • damaged
  • broken
  • worn-out
  • appliance
  • household items
  • it is unacceptable
  • inconvenient
  • inhabitable
  • affecting
  • negatively
  • urgent attention
  • replacement
  • repair
  • resolve
  • maintenance
  • prompt response
  • Thank you for your attention
  • Yours sincerely
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