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Band 2.5

Some people think news has no connection to people's lives, so it is a waste of time to read the newspaper and watch television news programs to what ettent do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
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 believe that spending time watching or reading
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news
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the news
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 is a waste
,
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apply
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 because
these information
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have
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has
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 no
benifits
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benefits
benefit
 on
individuals
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individuals'
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 lives. I disagree because newspapers are very important, as they keep us updated on what is happening
localy
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locally
 and internationally.
News
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 plays a vital role in keeping
people
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 informed. There are a
lot
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lot of
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 events happening around the world that
the
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apply
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society should be aware of.
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, many nations are dying because of
the
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apply
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war,
hanger
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hunger
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 and more. Media helps these
people
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 by delivering their voices and
vivide
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vivid
 images
on
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of
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 the tragedy they are living
.
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in.
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,
news
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outets
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outlets
contributes
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contribute
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in
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to
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 providing safety to the community. In case there is a criminal,
the
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they
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 tell
people
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 to take
coution
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caution
 and protect themselves from the danger.
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, others argue that
news
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 is not important as it has no relationship to their lives.
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 to say, they prefer to focus on their daily tasks than knowing about the world. In conclusion,
while
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 some
people
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 enjoy reading
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news
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 to
cultuvate
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cultivate
 themselves about the world, others eliminate its importance.

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Improve the clarity and development of your main points. Each point should be expanded with more detail and explanation.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to maintain a logical flow throughout your essay. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs seamlessly.
task achievement
You have a clear stance on the topic and provide relevant reasons to support your opinion.
task achievement
You demonstrate an awareness of opposing views, which adds depth to your argument.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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