In the last century, urban development has focused on building tall building as opposed to wide flat ones. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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been
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changing
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century, wide flat buildings
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replaced
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tall structures. In
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essay,
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the advantages will be enumerated.
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, the disadvantages will be highlighted.
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, a suitable conclusion will be provided. Taller constructions are a response to the large number of
people
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who prefer to live in a central city in
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society. With
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type of
apartments
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more
people
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can live in the same area and, naturally, the housing offer can increase and with
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some
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can get into the property ladder.
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, for the majors and their teams the urban planification is easier to prepare and the hotspots of traffic can be controlled more efficently. On the flip side, density is a real issue when the contrustuctions are taller. The public spaces in the major cities of the world have problems when it comes to the events that are taking
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there. The lack of personal space in parks, cinemas and malls
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damaging the whole point of those places. Some
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prefer to stay at their
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because of the uncontrolled mass of
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walking around. Given the above, the number of citizens in certain areas
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resulting in a garbage problem for their inhabitants and,
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consequence
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, some diseases are
spreding
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spreading
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faster. In conclusion, there are many advantages
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this
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construction method, the are many opportunities to buy an
aparment
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apartment
and it is easier to find one in a
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district
of your choice.
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, the density of these
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of housing can result in a mental health problem.

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grammar
Improve grammatical accuracy, particularly in terms of subject-verb agreement and spelling. For example, 'accommodation' should be spelled correctly and 'have been changing' could be used instead of 'have been changin'.
content
Expand on your ideas with more detailed examples and explanations. This could strengthen your arguments about advantages and disadvantages.
vocabulary
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your writing. Consider synonyms or alternative phrases for commonly used words.
structure
The essay follows a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
content
The discussion of both advantages and disadvantages shows a balanced approach to the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urban development
  • High-rise buildings
  • Skyscrapers
  • Mixed-use developments
  • Vertical construction
  • Urban heat island effect
  • Structural integrity
  • Evacuation procedures
  • Economical land use
  • City skyline
  • Environmental conservation
  • Tourism boost
  • Social interactions
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